Black Ghost

Unlike the first review, I didn't think that the repetition of "Mister moon" in the first stanza was very good. It seemed like a lot, and it was very distracting. ...

Even though I don't know who the person is, I can tell you worked hard on this because it really shows. ^_^ It all looks very detailed and realistic, and ...

You know, I would think it would have been a better idea if you had worked a little harder on this before posting it on YWS. This forum isn't a ...

Finished! Hope it helped. :P Next? [s] BlackGhost [/s]

Greetings! Here's your line by line. :D Look both ways, make sure no one's watching. Good opening line. It really establishes the whole tone and situation, and is a really ...

Greetings, JFW1415, here's your line by line. :P Look both ways, make sure no one's watching. Good opening line. It establishes that the character is alone, and is probably about ...

Done ^_^ Anyone else? [s] BlackGhost [/s]

Hey Kalliope! Here's your review. ^_^ OVERVIEW: To start with, even though you've posted two parts, it's very, very short. Short enough that you almost don't have enough even to ...

Black Ghost, at your services! :P I'm trying to get my review count up as much as possible, so I'll be happy to critique your works. ^_^ THINGS I CRITIQUE: ...

Disturbia in your pants. XD [s] BlackGhost [/s]

F.R.E.D! OMG I still have to show you a magic trick! xD [s] BlackGhost [/s]

I've never met anyone famous from the U.S, but I've met a few famous people from Lebanon. One of them is my great uncle ( Wadi El Safi ), who ...

Eek, I know I do. Today I was looking at some of my reviews and stories from when I first joined the site (a little more than two years ago), ...

Hi! Interesting start to you novel, I could see how this could turn into a really awesome story. :P A few things though: I really didn't like the way you ...

I've never had experience writing trilogies, but in my opinion it depends on what kind of writer you are. If you're the kind who has strong, consistent characters, then I'd ...